The Bag's Dream Jana Semaan
The bag was upbeatHe has a family
But a torn up family
Waiting to get adopted
An orphan in a line
The bag's dream
Dejected like a
Dog that has been http://youtu.be/LNGEsU-BbHc
Kicked out of his
Own house
The bag's dream
Flung in a cupboard
A bee stuck in a jar
He has a family
The Bag's Dream
JANA SEMAAN
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ReplyDeleteDear Janna,
ReplyDeleteWonderful Poem!
I really liked the tone of your poem!
Dear Jana,
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful poem. I love the metaphor," A bee stuck in a jar". I can hear the emotion in your words. Keep writing Jana you have a beautiful creative mind. This summer how about buying a sparkling, fancy blank writing book and writing poetry all summer. Let your mind run wild in your book and save all your precious memories in words. That's what good writers do. We will meet next week to talk about theme. Mrs Hoegen
Dear Jana,
ReplyDeleteI think the tone of your peom is great! I really liked it when you said, "Waiting to get adopted, an orphan in a line." Overalll an magnifiscant peom.
Kaitlyn
Dear Jana
ReplyDeleteThe poem you wrote is very good and interesting
Tommy
Dear Jana
ReplyDeleteI really liked your poem and how u added similes and mostly metaphors
good work
dear Jana,
ReplyDeleteamazing poem really good metaphors and similes
from louis
dear Jana
ReplyDeletei really liked your poem and i also liked how you used similes and metaphors
dear Jana
ReplyDeletethis poem is fantastic and i liked your methaphor
Dear Jana,
ReplyDeleteYou're poem was really great, it felt sad and depressing, it was wonderful!!!, I am very proud of you're work.Great job keep it up!
Dear Jana,
ReplyDeleteI liked the way you set the poem it was perfect.
Also I think the meaning of this poem is
Stick to your dream and it will stick to you.