Read it as you like!
Alon Haas
Alon Haas
The bag is a life waiting to explore the world
It's a friend that you carry all your life, but never realize
How the bag means everything to me!
It survived some serious, scary adventures like a battleship in the ocean
But now, just waits in the closet like a magical, mysterious, musty broom
How the bag means everything to me!
It is stuck, with no companions, like an old woman living alone
How the bag means everything to me!
Crash, a car hit the bag
Now, no one wants it
Now, no one wants it
Oh,
how I want it back
how I want it back
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ReplyDeleteamazing poem
ReplyDeletealon
Dear Alon,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your peom!! It's amazing, I did not find any mistakes. Well done!
Kaitlyn
dear alon i think your poem have great emotion
ReplyDeleteDear Alon
ReplyDeleteI really felt the forgotten feeling of the bag in your wonderful poem.
Tommy
Dear alon
ReplyDeleteI really liked your similes and how u described your bag
and how u show love than the others
dear adrien
Deleteyou spelled "you wrong"
from louis
Dear alon it like the bag has a pesonalty
ReplyDeleteDear Alon,
ReplyDeleteLove your poem and I think that you're almost there and I really like it
this is from the heart.
dear alon,
ReplyDeleteexcellent poem really great repeat phrase
from louis
Dear Alon
ReplyDeleteI really liked your poem and there were no mistakes, u used methapors and they where great. u are doing fantastic!
Dear Alon
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed it as I read it also I liked the metaphors in it. I could tell it had a deep meaning but I could not figure it out. Fantastic poem!
From Gustav
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